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Ryuuzaki L
Number of posts : 4350 Age : 29 Location : in my own little world...... Registration date : 2008-03-07
Shinigami Powers Death God and Death Gods Name: 0 Name=Ryuk Death Note: 0 Shinigami Eyes: 80
| Subject: Re: The Cafe Mon Jul 28, 2008 8:55 pm | |
| its cool. I like it so far. ^^ | |
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Ravenicka(AKA R) civillian
Number of posts : 3566 Age : 31 Location : Somewhere I don't want to be right now......I'm gonna go gut a clown. Registration date : 2008-03-05
Shinigami Powers Death God and Death Gods Name: 0 Name= Death Note: 0 Shinigami Eyes: 0
| Subject: Re: The Cafe Mon Jul 28, 2008 8:59 pm | |
| really?!I'm so self conscious of my work.I had to see if it was any good. | |
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Ryuuzaki L
Number of posts : 4350 Age : 29 Location : in my own little world...... Registration date : 2008-03-07
Shinigami Powers Death God and Death Gods Name: 0 Name=Ryuk Death Note: 0 Shinigami Eyes: 80
| Subject: Re: The Cafe Mon Jul 28, 2008 9:01 pm | |
| I think yu could use something to put inbetween the last two sentences. Like something to do what happens in battle about the sadness or something like that. | |
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Ravenicka(AKA R) civillian
Number of posts : 3566 Age : 31 Location : Somewhere I don't want to be right now......I'm gonna go gut a clown. Registration date : 2008-03-05
Shinigami Powers Death God and Death Gods Name: 0 Name= Death Note: 0 Shinigami Eyes: 0
| Subject: Re: The Cafe Mon Jul 28, 2008 9:07 pm | |
| I'll consider it and see if I can fit something in there. | |
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Ryuuzaki L
Number of posts : 4350 Age : 29 Location : in my own little world...... Registration date : 2008-03-07
Shinigami Powers Death God and Death Gods Name: 0 Name=Ryuk Death Note: 0 Shinigami Eyes: 80
| Subject: Re: The Cafe Mon Jul 28, 2008 9:09 pm | |
| like how the people miss their loved ones and cry tears or something. | |
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Ravenicka(AKA R) civillian
Number of posts : 3566 Age : 31 Location : Somewhere I don't want to be right now......I'm gonna go gut a clown. Registration date : 2008-03-05
Shinigami Powers Death God and Death Gods Name: 0 Name= Death Note: 0 Shinigami Eyes: 0
| Subject: Re: The Cafe Mon Jul 28, 2008 9:10 pm | |
| how about this
Blood pools where lives were slain | |
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Ryuuzaki L
Number of posts : 4350 Age : 29 Location : in my own little world...... Registration date : 2008-03-07
Shinigami Powers Death God and Death Gods Name: 0 Name=Ryuk Death Note: 0 Shinigami Eyes: 80
| Subject: Re: The Cafe Mon Jul 28, 2008 9:11 pm | |
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Ravenicka(AKA R) civillian
Number of posts : 3566 Age : 31 Location : Somewhere I don't want to be right now......I'm gonna go gut a clown. Registration date : 2008-03-05
Shinigami Powers Death God and Death Gods Name: 0 Name= Death Note: 0 Shinigami Eyes: 0
| Subject: Re: The Cafe Mon Jul 28, 2008 9:15 pm | |
| So so far I has
What was once bubbly is now dead. What was once happy is now dread. The love is gone and peace is dead.
War irrupts in fights in pain. Blood pools where lives were slain Acid falls from clouds like rain. | |
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Ryuuzaki L
Number of posts : 4350 Age : 29 Location : in my own little world...... Registration date : 2008-03-07
Shinigami Powers Death God and Death Gods Name: 0 Name=Ryuk Death Note: 0 Shinigami Eyes: 80
| Subject: Re: The Cafe Mon Jul 28, 2008 9:17 pm | |
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Ravenicka(AKA R) civillian
Number of posts : 3566 Age : 31 Location : Somewhere I don't want to be right now......I'm gonna go gut a clown. Registration date : 2008-03-05
Shinigami Powers Death God and Death Gods Name: 0 Name= Death Note: 0 Shinigami Eyes: 0
| Subject: Re: The Cafe Mon Jul 28, 2008 9:21 pm | |
| Now I have to think of a refrain.Something that is repeated more than once that speaks the true message of the song.I'll think of it later.My inspiration light just flicked off. | |
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Ryuuzaki L
Number of posts : 4350 Age : 29 Location : in my own little world...... Registration date : 2008-03-07
Shinigami Powers Death God and Death Gods Name: 0 Name=Ryuk Death Note: 0 Shinigami Eyes: 80
| Subject: Re: The Cafe Mon Jul 28, 2008 9:22 pm | |
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Ravenicka(AKA R) civillian
Number of posts : 3566 Age : 31 Location : Somewhere I don't want to be right now......I'm gonna go gut a clown. Registration date : 2008-03-05
Shinigami Powers Death God and Death Gods Name: 0 Name= Death Note: 0 Shinigami Eyes: 0
| Subject: Re: The Cafe Mon Jul 28, 2008 9:25 pm | |
| If you want and I promise one day when this song becomes famous you will get credit lol My brain is just so fickle.One minute I have shit loads of inspiration and the next it's all gone.It usually takes me a while to get down a whole song and I'm always rewriting it and editing it. | |
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Ryuuzaki L
Number of posts : 4350 Age : 29 Location : in my own little world...... Registration date : 2008-03-07
Shinigami Powers Death God and Death Gods Name: 0 Name=Ryuk Death Note: 0 Shinigami Eyes: 80
| Subject: Re: The Cafe Mon Jul 28, 2008 9:26 pm | |
| that what happens to me when i write poems. | |
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Ravenicka(AKA R) civillian
Number of posts : 3566 Age : 31 Location : Somewhere I don't want to be right now......I'm gonna go gut a clown. Registration date : 2008-03-05
Shinigami Powers Death God and Death Gods Name: 0 Name= Death Note: 0 Shinigami Eyes: 0
| Subject: Re: The Cafe Mon Jul 28, 2008 9:31 pm | |
| lol I hate to have to leave ya but it's my bed time.Night Night ^_^ | |
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Ryuuzaki L
Number of posts : 4350 Age : 29 Location : in my own little world...... Registration date : 2008-03-07
Shinigami Powers Death God and Death Gods Name: 0 Name=Ryuk Death Note: 0 Shinigami Eyes: 80
| Subject: Re: The Cafe Mon Jul 28, 2008 9:36 pm | |
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Yatikami, Mei civillian
Number of posts : 1858 Age : 33 Location : Neverland Registration date : 2008-04-02
Shinigami Powers Death God and Death Gods Name: 0 Name= Death Note: 500 Shinigami Eyes: Yes
| Subject: Re: The Cafe Tue Jul 29, 2008 8:45 am | |
| I like it lots Rave-chan! You are doing good so far!! Here!! Lookie, lookie! I've been working on some poem-y stuff, tell me if they're okay!! Broken Eyes Too quick to criticize The sun with broken eyes No room to let him breathe It’s left scars on me When there’s no need to stay The daydreams wilt away Demons crawling to get free Never anyone seeing me for me Some things aren’t ment to be I get lost sometimes Trying to read the signs No longer welcome times All the shouts and jeers Maybe I’m going deaf Words no longer work Neither theirs nor mine Want out of the cell room Before finding answers in due time Well I get lost sometimes Where I go, there are no signs Need to get away from here Maybe I’m going blind I just can’t seem to find A place to call home A people to call mine Nani!? So what'cha think! It's old and I found it on my microsoft looking for something else. The second stanza is weak but oh'weeelll!!! Yatikami, Mei-chan | |
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Ryuuzaki L
Number of posts : 4350 Age : 29 Location : in my own little world...... Registration date : 2008-03-07
Shinigami Powers Death God and Death Gods Name: 0 Name=Ryuk Death Note: 0 Shinigami Eyes: 80
| Subject: Re: The Cafe Tue Jul 29, 2008 9:10 am | |
| I like it. Write another one. ^^ | |
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Ravenicka(AKA R) civillian
Number of posts : 3566 Age : 31 Location : Somewhere I don't want to be right now......I'm gonna go gut a clown. Registration date : 2008-03-05
Shinigami Powers Death God and Death Gods Name: 0 Name= Death Note: 0 Shinigami Eyes: 0
| Subject: Re: The Cafe Tue Jul 29, 2008 2:41 pm | |
| I like it too.You must've been pretty depressed when you wrote it though. | |
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Ryuuzaki L
Number of posts : 4350 Age : 29 Location : in my own little world...... Registration date : 2008-03-07
Shinigami Powers Death God and Death Gods Name: 0 Name=Ryuk Death Note: 0 Shinigami Eyes: 80
| Subject: Re: The Cafe Tue Jul 29, 2008 8:09 pm | |
| i wrote a new poem today. | |
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Ravenicka(AKA R) civillian
Number of posts : 3566 Age : 31 Location : Somewhere I don't want to be right now......I'm gonna go gut a clown. Registration date : 2008-03-05
Shinigami Powers Death God and Death Gods Name: 0 Name= Death Note: 0 Shinigami Eyes: 0
| Subject: Re: The Cafe Wed Jul 30, 2008 4:53 pm | |
| well then let's hear it and I finished my other one lat night when I couldn't sleep. | |
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Ryuuzaki L
Number of posts : 4350 Age : 29 Location : in my own little world...... Registration date : 2008-03-07
Shinigami Powers Death God and Death Gods Name: 0 Name=Ryuk Death Note: 0 Shinigami Eyes: 80
| Subject: Re: The Cafe Wed Jul 30, 2008 5:55 pm | |
| i cant figure out the last paragarph for it. | |
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Ravenicka(AKA R) civillian
Number of posts : 3566 Age : 31 Location : Somewhere I don't want to be right now......I'm gonna go gut a clown. Registration date : 2008-03-05
Shinigami Powers Death God and Death Gods Name: 0 Name= Death Note: 0 Shinigami Eyes: 0
| Subject: Re: The Cafe Wed Jul 30, 2008 8:45 pm | |
| well what do you have so far? | |
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Ryuuzaki L
Number of posts : 4350 Age : 29 Location : in my own little world...... Registration date : 2008-03-07
Shinigami Powers Death God and Death Gods Name: 0 Name=Ryuk Death Note: 0 Shinigami Eyes: 80
| Subject: Re: The Cafe Wed Jul 30, 2008 8:56 pm | |
| I figured it out. Its all done. ^^ | |
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Ravenicka(AKA R) civillian
Number of posts : 3566 Age : 31 Location : Somewhere I don't want to be right now......I'm gonna go gut a clown. Registration date : 2008-03-05
Shinigami Powers Death God and Death Gods Name: 0 Name= Death Note: 0 Shinigami Eyes: 0
| Subject: Re: The Cafe Wed Jul 30, 2008 9:08 pm | |
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Ryuuzaki L
Number of posts : 4350 Age : 29 Location : in my own little world...... Registration date : 2008-03-07
Shinigami Powers Death God and Death Gods Name: 0 Name=Ryuk Death Note: 0 Shinigami Eyes: 80
| Subject: Re: The Cafe Wed Jul 30, 2008 9:21 pm | |
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